Good ideas, but it could do with some proof-reading - there are quite a few grammatical errors. For example, the story is narrated in the past tense, but on page 3, briefly switches to the present tense:
"Nope, way bigger than that." he sets the laptops down on the coffee table.
I also reckon "he" in the above example should have an uppercase "H" and should maybe start on a new line.
On page 7:
"Cant." Fay assured, "The machine code ..."
has a missing apostrophe and I think (but I'm not sure) the… (more)
Good ideas, but it could do with some proof-reading - there are quite a few grammatical errors. For example, the story is narrated in the past tense, but on page 3, briefly switches to the present tense:
"Nope, way bigger than that." he sets the laptops down on the coffee table.
I also reckon "he" in the above example should have an uppercase "H" and should maybe start on a new line.
On page 7:
"Cant." Fay assured, "The machine code ..."
has a missing apostrophe and I think (but I'm not sure) the period should be a comma ("Can't, " ...)
Page 11:
"Well, go head and show it to me. What is it?"
(go ahead)
Page 13:
"... If you're and old white male ..."
(... an old white male ...)
"Second Life" is mentioned twice in the story, the first time without any capitalization, the second time with a capital "S" but lowercase "l".
Those are just a few examples of the errors I spotted. Sorry if I'm being too critical, but I'm the kind of person for whom spelling and grammar errors just jump out of the page - kind of like Russell Crowe seeing patterns in newspapers in "A Beautiful Mind".
Mike, I enjoyed your book! It was a quite fast read. I definitely could imagine the book being "filled out more". This was my first introduction into the "singularity" concept, even though I had heard of Ray Kurzweil. You brought a lot of cool concepts into my mind. Thanks!
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Tue, 15 Feb 2011 01:48:15 +0100
Good ideas, but it could do with some proof-reading - there are quite a few grammatical errors. For example, the story is narrated in the past tense, but on page 3, briefly switches to the present tense:
"Nope, way bigger than that." he sets the laptops down on the coffee table.
I also reckon "he" in the above example should have an uppercase "H" and should maybe start on a new line.
On page 7:
"Cant." Fay assured, "The machine code ..."
has a missing apostrophe and I think (but I'm not sure) the… (more)
Good ideas, but it could do with some proof-reading - there are quite a few grammatical errors. For example, the story is narrated in the past tense, but on page 3, briefly switches to the present tense:
"Nope, way bigger than that." he sets the laptops down on the coffee table.
I also reckon "he" in the above example should have an uppercase "H" and should maybe start on a new line.
On page 7:
"Cant." Fay assured, "The machine code ..."
has a missing apostrophe and I think (but I'm not sure) the period should be a comma ("Can't, " ...)
Page 11:
"Well, go head and show it to me. What is it?"
(go ahead)
Page 13:
"... If you're and old white male ..."
(... an old white male ...)
"Second Life" is mentioned twice in the story, the first time without any capitalization, the second time with a capital "S" but lowercase "l".
Those are just a few examples of the errors I spotted. Sorry if I'm being too critical, but I'm the kind of person for whom spelling and grammar errors just jump out of the page - kind of like Russell Crowe seeing patterns in newspapers in "A Beautiful Mind".
(less)Sat, 05 Feb 2011 09:46:11 +0100
You have a grater than 1/7 chance of being right Mike. It's rare that anything worthwhile gets done on a Monday. Thanks for the entertaining read.
Mon, 26 Jul 2010 00:35:33 +0200
Mike, I enjoyed your book! It was a quite fast read. I definitely could imagine the book being "filled out more". This was my first introduction into the "singularity" concept, even though I had heard of Ray Kurzweil. You brought a lot of cool concepts into my mind. Thanks!
Wed, 14 Apr 2010 04:14:21 +0200
Mispeled, thank you so much for the comment. Yeah, I'm a big believer in the 'hard-take-off' theory of the Singularity.
Wed, 14 Apr 2010 00:13:03 +0200
Interesting, if a bit fast paced.